08-31-2013, 12:08 PM
I like what you have done and your close is stronger now, as are the middle stanzas. 
It's great that there is a personal connection for you as well. Hopefully, one of the many sonneteers on site will review your iambic pentameter. I think you could do with a period after sight and a comma after storm. See what you and others think. Nice edit. 
It's great that there is a personal connection for you as well. Hopefully, one of the many sonneteers on site will review your iambic pentameter. I think you could do with a period after sight and a comma after storm. See what you and others think. Nice edit.
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris