08-31-2013, 06:50 AM
Compare the first two lines to the last two. I say both semantically and sonically the first two lines are much richer and deeper. So the ending comes across quite flat in comparison. I wasn't surprised either by the ending; the exclamation! didn't shake me. I guess I really want an actual exclamation! instead of just the word and the symbol and the hope that they will hold the weight.
But like I said, this might be the very thing that the poem is trying to reveal. This is what happens when the confusion is made and you go on and make a point!
The first two lines are really sharp and rich.
a few thoughts,
Bill
But like I said, this might be the very thing that the poem is trying to reveal. This is what happens when the confusion is made and you go on and make a point!
The first two lines are really sharp and rich.
a few thoughts,
Bill