08-29-2013, 07:35 AM
it's early morn here so i'm just skimming the site till breaky.
on first pass it feels a lot smother.
i'll give some in depth feedback in a while.
one thing struck me,
I don’t hear the rhythm of your high heels,
my majorette's march across wooden floors.
i wonder if
a majorette's march across wooden floors.
would clear any ambiguity of the line?
on first pass it feels a lot smother.
i'll give some in depth feedback in a while.
one thing struck me,
I don’t hear the rhythm of your high heels,
my majorette's march across wooden floors.
i wonder if
a majorette's march across wooden floors.
would clear any ambiguity of the line?