08-28-2013, 10:37 AM
Thanks Billy! I tried to use the last stanza as a reveal that the couple didn't just break up, but that she has deceased, of course. It may come off too gimmicky, because it is of a different syle than the rest. It was meant to be the sober reality, as it were. Meter is tough for me, other than count,
but I will try to sound it out and make the adjustments that you recommend. Much obliged for the read and opinion!
/Chris
but I will try to sound it out and make the adjustments that you recommend. Much obliged for the read and opinion!
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris

