08-28-2013, 09:35 AM
i think as a senryu it works well.
when ever you do a haiku or senryu or short poem, one of the things we can do
is try swapping the lines about, take words away and if it works don't put them back
when ever you do a haiku or senryu or short poem, one of the things we can do
is try swapping the lines about, take words away and if it works don't put them back
