08-27-2013, 01:02 AM
A sea of discarded ideas,
That makes sense. It's full of Pig's Arse sense, which I admire. But what else is there?
This poem is easy to write. It has some good things going on, but they feel like things that just so often happen. For some of us it's more often. Every day often.
You have a poetic mind, but that's all there is in this poem.
Wading through a lack of time . . . . That's the motivation behind this poem. The poem gives the motivation but not the poem.
Maybe you have made better poems. This one fits somewhere between what better poems you may have made. But not much in this one.
That makes sense. It's full of Pig's Arse sense, which I admire. But what else is there?
This poem is easy to write. It has some good things going on, but they feel like things that just so often happen. For some of us it's more often. Every day often.
You have a poetic mind, but that's all there is in this poem.
Wading through a lack of time . . . . That's the motivation behind this poem. The poem gives the motivation but not the poem.
Maybe you have made better poems. This one fits somewhere between what better poems you may have made. But not much in this one.