"Stormfront" (a beginner's sonnet)

[tectak]

Edited Version:

-Stormfront-

From the distant crease where waves meet skies,
great shadowed, phantom mountains rise.
Grey, smoky roots stretch out their veins
in tendrilled clouds that bring the rains. Very easy toread and assimilate. Concise

Their summits are crowned with runaway light, The "their" is disconnected but only because of the syntax. Of course, you refer to the mountains, but they were a long time back. Since thenwe have had veins, roots and clouds. Try "Summits like jewels crowned with runaway(?) light" to remove the small issue.
the last memory of a sun lost to sight "hold on to the memory of a sun out if sight."
behind the thick veil of this oncoming storm: This storm? What storm? "an oncoming storm"
transient beast of impermanent form. "a transient beast of..

Dark passions run out rushing over the sea,
merging, downpouring, rejoining; set free.A wasted semi colon
Once terrible stormclouds I now hear rejoice, put the semi colon here.
the wind, rain, and thunder all lend them their voice.

Raindrops meet ocean, absorbed by their source.
Amazed, I watch nature recycle her course.

A very good edit. Well done.
Your poem so my lines only suggestion
Best,
tectak

Original Version:

-Stormfront-

From the distant line where seas meet skies,
great shadowed, phantom mountains rise.
Their smoky roots stretch out their veins
in tendrilled clouds that bring the rains.

Their summits are crowned with rays of light,
the last memory of a sun lost to sight
behind the thick veil of this oncoming storm:
transient beast of impermanent form.

Yes, the mountains are moving into the sea,
merging, downpouring, rejoining; set free.
Once terrible stormclouds I now hear rejoice,
the wind, rain, and thunder all lend them their voice.

Raindrops meet ocean, absorbed in their source.
Amazed, I watch nature recycle her course.