08-26-2013, 09:09 AM
Hi Survivor
The topic you have chosen is solid and since it is that close to you, you should be able to address the issue with images of social decline turned around by support structures. I can give you many examples of poor poetry I have written that other site have told me is brilliant, this is no use to me when I want to improve the poem. This site is very blunt when you ask for feedback, to grow as a poet my advice would be take the advice, I still write crap poems but because of this site I now know they are crap. I would very much like to see some more of your work and I would like to see this poem developed to do the topic justice. Best TOMH
The topic you have chosen is solid and since it is that close to you, you should be able to address the issue with images of social decline turned around by support structures. I can give you many examples of poor poetry I have written that other site have told me is brilliant, this is no use to me when I want to improve the poem. This site is very blunt when you ask for feedback, to grow as a poet my advice would be take the advice, I still write crap poems but because of this site I now know they are crap. I would very much like to see some more of your work and I would like to see this poem developed to do the topic justice. Best TOMH
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