The Addiction Epidemic

[Survivor]

Drugs of pleasure are an escape from earth.

Living in a place known as imaginary paradise.

Once addicts come back to the world and reality,
The toleration of life is torturous.

Craving drugs as if they need food to satisfy an appetite.

Betrayal is being committed to support the habit of vileness.

Desperation leads to a life of crime for artificial gratification.

Recovery only occurs when the spirit is broken,
Willing to travel the rough journey to genuine happiness.

Wow, wasn’t expecting that; everybody else on many other poetry websites I go seem to have a different view. I have numerous writings with many writing styles. I approach choose the writing style which I feels is best for the topic. This is a social issue—not a raw, powerful emotions. If you read my poem based on intense feelings, such as depression and anxiety, you would see different writing styles. I also write with strong logic in which I let the reader pick up on by themselves and I occasionally want to let the reader use their imagination. I chose this topic because the drug problem in my area is the worst it’s ever been, and now my bother is now in a forced rehab in order to come off of drugs, so I just wanted to address the issue.

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Hi,

First thing to consider: Making propositional statements, whether they are true or not, carry nearly no emotive power. For poetry to be effective it can't make vague, flat statements like this.

Example:

Craving drugs as if they need food to satisfy an appetite.

This simile stops short of actually doing anything. However if you took this line and developed it into the central conceit of the poem you could present us with a scene of someone eating at a banquet table, the food delectable, but ultimately those eating getting thinner and weaker. You could tie drugs into the title and not mention them in the poem.

Obviously, I'm not saying this is what you must do to salvage the concept. It's more an approach you might consider to take this in a new direction.

Just some thoughts, good luck with it.

Best,

Todd

Drugs of pleasure are an escape from earth.

Living in a place known as imaginary paradise.

Once addicts come back to the world and reality,
The toleration of life is torturous.

Craving drugs as if they need food to satisfy an appetite.

Betrayal is being committed to support the habit of vileness.

Desperation leads to a life of crime for artificial gratification.

Recovery only occurs when the spirit is broken,
Willing to travel the rough journey to genuine happiness.

Wow, wasn’t expecting that; everybody else on many other poetry websites I go seem to have a different view. I have numerous writings with many writing styles. I approach choose the writing style which I feels is best for the topic. This is a social issue—not a raw, powerful emotions. If you read my poem based on intense feelings, such as depression and anxiety, you would see different writing styles. I also write with strong logic in which I let the reader pick up on by themselves and I occasionally want to let the reader use their imagination. I chose this topic because the drug problem in my area is the worst it’s ever been, and now my bother is now in a forced rehab in order to come off of drugs, so I just wanted to address the issue.