08-23-2013, 10:06 PM
Tom, there's a bump in your great piece. Trim that 10-syllable count in your last line:
'a new chance provided there's rain'
or something!
Not sure if the bump is required there, but one of the great things about establishing a meter is that you can deviate from it to create effect.
'a new chance provided there's rain'
or something!
Not sure if the bump is required there, but one of the great things about establishing a meter is that you can deviate from it to create effect.