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08-22-2013, 10:55 AM
Hello Sunrose, I am still pretty new to this so here it goes. I totally agree with volaticus about the cliches and Im sure punctuation always helps a reader understand how a poem should flow- If done properly. Anyways I personally love the imagery of little swinging legs. If it wasn't for that I wouldn't have gotten you were a kid until the very end. I think with a some editing you could really have yourself a great poem. Thanks for the read!
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Silence - by SunRose - 08-15-2013, 11:36 AM
RE: Silence - by Volaticus - 08-15-2013, 12:30 PM
RE: Silence - by ChristopherSea - 08-15-2013, 09:32 PM
RE: Silence - by 1skylande1 - 08-17-2013, 05:50 PM
RE: Silence - by FlipFlop - 08-18-2013, 04:40 AM
RE: Silence - by TheWall0912 - 08-19-2013, 09:18 PM
RE: Silence - by lukeJones - 08-20-2013, 11:37 PM
RE: Silence - by Bunx - 08-21-2013, 07:36 AM
RE: Silence - by billy - 08-21-2013, 09:58 AM
RE: Silence - by FayandFire - 08-22-2013, 10:55 AM
RE: Silence - by mwhite0017 - 08-29-2013, 11:30 AM
RE: Silence - by cheyrn - 01-08-2014, 08:47 PM
RE: Silence - by Destructed - 01-11-2014, 10:43 AM
RE: Silence - by teejai - 01-12-2014, 12:27 PM
RE: Silence - by tomoffing - 01-12-2014, 08:29 PM
RE: Silence - by Mikeodial - 01-16-2014, 11:49 AM
RE: Silence - by Blake - 01-17-2014, 07:40 AM
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