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Dying Breed
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08-22-2013, 12:21 AM
Just commenting on the fucks in line two. If it were related to one person than I would like the your fucks suggestion of Tom's. Given the context though, if you were to keep the line, maybe "with you reckless fucks" would be clearer.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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Dying Breed - by Expendable Youth. - 08-21-2013, 11:01 PM
RE: Dying Breed - by Todd - 08-21-2013, 11:30 PM
RE: Dying Breed - by Expendable Youth. - 08-21-2013, 11:35 PM
RE: Dying Breed - by tectak - 08-22-2013, 12:11 AM
RE: Dying Breed - by Todd - 08-22-2013, 12:21 AM
RE: Dying Breed - by Expendable Youth. - 08-22-2013, 07:23 AM
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