A fallen hero

[Bunx]

Pick up my sword, bring it to me
Make me believe once more
I've lost all my faith
But I won't fleeforeshadowing i assume. i would maybe try and use punctuation to indicate full stops in the poem. i am pausing and the end of every line. it is pretty dramatic

Saddle my horsewho is saddling your horse?
Make me rise for the last time
I can grieve no longer
I have no remorselike the last three lines of this stanza. im confused is the main character talking to a ally or himself?

Dawn is a forgotten thought in my head
Let me see the sun at this end of mine
I want to feel the last light's kisslucky knight!
I can't see anymore what lies aheadi like how you compare death to mystery and a light at the end of the day

I've bled
and I've shed
way too much bloodi would not say "way"
My soul is now partly mudkilling dampers the soul?
But I have no remorse
I'm prepared to die

sonata,
good poem! it definitely appealed to my gamer/board gaming side. I like that you paint a picture of the final moments of a warrior. The part about last kiss was a bit random. i think you could write more poems in the same vein to tell a story.
Rob