After the Flood

[milo]

He kicks beneath the paling crust
to where the sun has failed the earth
and flocculation turned the juice
into a suffocant for seed,
and quenched the fuse of life.
The flood has gone; upon bare land
he scarifies the earth again
and turns the rotting germ to light.
Time walks beside the new sown grain
and promises each dormant husk
another chance.
Provided there is rain.

Tectak
Spring 2013

this is actually pretty fucking good. If you put a gun to my head, I would gripe about the second 'and" (L5) possibly the flagrancy of 'upon' and perhaps 'flocculation' for alien entity syndrome. Other than that, I am pretty much sold on the first draft here, Tom, and you know that doesn't happen often.