Bird (edit 2)

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Nice edit, but correct the typos and some grammer:

Thnx for reading/critiquing.

Most of the critique made sense and i'll certainly fix the errors however
I have two questions,

If I were to change the first line to "A somber sparrow" as you suggested would it still be evident that I was referring to the sparrow in the line "I realize you"? As it stands it feels like the narrator is speaking to the bird but i'm not sure if that would be as clear if I put an "a" before "somber sparrow" also, I thought "realize" was correct but maybe "acknowledge" makes more sense, I guess that isn't really a question more of a concern. I think on that ill try to get a second opinion. that. Thnx again