Snail

[Keith]

Who are you? Freaking snail,
I said with a despicable gock. to, rather than 'with' since gock is the underbelly ?
Gock the freak on out of here, nice play
I thought, slimely slop. great opening you have my attention

Snails move like a mop!
That leaves gooey sloop,
sticking on my shoe's sole.
My soul, the woe of snails
is similar to the woes of my foes! not sure this stanza helps in fact it gives away the last line

Slowly they move in a pack around me, line is too long it breaks the rhythm could drop 'move in a'
slipping into my every mole.
It doesn't matter if it hurts, see,
making me slime is their goal.

So I will look at them nasty
gocking snails, and mock them
till they drop. Because sneaky till they're slop ?
smiley moving creatures are not friends
I want. this is a strong end that makes you go, ohh he's talking about slimy non friends but not if you give it away in stanza two.

I really enjoyed this one Bunx and I have new word gock hope the comments help. Best TOMH