Hand Me Down to die
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(08-15-2013, 02:18 AM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  final
I’m dead-head to head
with bronzing sunflowers,
wearing my Grandpa’s
tattered Fedora.
I don't have anything else to add that hasn't been covered. Just one issue, though maybe it's just me. When I read "I'm dead-head to head", I actually read "dead-head" as joined words. Is this intentional? Maybe make the dash longer, or put a space, like: "dead — head".

I'm glad you decided to give it some touch ups, the meter is good now in the final Smile.
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Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-15-2013, 02:18 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by Leanne - 08-15-2013, 05:03 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-15-2013, 05:17 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-15-2013, 07:43 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by tectak - 08-16-2013, 07:51 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-16-2013, 08:06 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by Leanne - 08-16-2013, 03:42 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by billy - 08-16-2013, 05:35 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-16-2013, 10:20 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by Apophrades - 08-17-2013, 01:14 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-17-2013, 10:07 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-18-2013, 03:48 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by trueenigma - 08-19-2013, 03:01 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-19-2013, 03:59 AM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by tectak - 08-21-2013, 06:47 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-21-2013, 06:59 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by Todd - 08-21-2013, 09:37 PM
RE: Hand Me Down to die - by ChristopherSea - 08-21-2013, 11:56 PM



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