08-16-2013, 01:31 AM
(08-13-2013, 03:12 AM)rowens Wrote: There are lots of things you could do with it. The rhymes and rhythm make it feel careless, but it depends on how tongue in cheek you want it to be. You have a lot of stuff to work with. Unless you're satisfied.
Lots of things?
Ah, I wrote it carelessly, so I did.
It was tongue in cheek - to the max. lol
I blurt 'em all out in one quick go so... I might be satisfied, I might not, it varies.
Thanks for the comments, if you have any ideas on betterment, I'm up for 'em.