Capes and Causeways (first poem please critique)

[ChristopherSea]

You should always be open to perfecting and polishing your work. I liked the line, 'Through this Tropical Camelot of thick air and nautical breezes', but you could work on all of the other lines. 'A western man I am' stood out like a throbbing sore toe for me unless you are the origianl 'Sam I am' of Dr Suess fame. I love the eastern shores myself, so describe them for us. Nothing is revealed about them here. Keep working on this one.