08-15-2013, 09:15 PM
'To be clear it doesn't bother me if it's disliked, I've had some harsh critique before, it just worries me that no one seems to understand this stuff. Do I need to be very literal about everything? I mean, this is poetry.. '
Everyone is telling you to develop your thesis. There is not much to understand. The quip you posted says: I am invisible in a crowd, but visible when alone. Try saying differently, like this:
At the bar last night,
I was cigarette smoke.
Tonight, in my room, I glow.
No matter what anyone says, keep reading and writing.
Everyone is telling you to develop your thesis. There is not much to understand. The quip you posted says: I am invisible in a crowd, but visible when alone. Try saying differently, like this:
At the bar last night,
I was cigarette smoke.
Tonight, in my room, I glow.
No matter what anyone says, keep reading and writing.
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris