08-15-2013, 01:01 PM
I really like your poem, it is worded rather interesting-ley which attracts me to it.
I think you used imagery really well, I could see what was going on.
When it comes to iam pentam, you could use some improvement. To make it work you really need to think out the lines, syllables and all that fun stuff. It does not flow for me the way an iam pentam usually does.
Good job,
keep writing.
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I think you used imagery really well, I could see what was going on.
When it comes to iam pentam, you could use some improvement. To make it work you really need to think out the lines, syllables and all that fun stuff. It does not flow for me the way an iam pentam usually does.
Good job,
keep writing.
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