08-15-2013, 02:18 AM
(08-14-2013, 12:22 PM)Volaticus Wrote: It made me smile, especially the last stanza and 'spilled clockwork innards' (brilliant image).Many thanks Volaticus for your kind words and the crit much appreciated L3 has been changed. This did actually happen although the story may have been a different one
I think 'there' in L3 should be 'they're'.
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