08-14-2013, 12:29 PM
I liked it, thought the focus of yellow in the beginning was a bit much. After that first few sentences you were more subtle in incorporating it. The one thing, a little old lady with a gold stapler, I get the impression she hit Penn with it.
If so, it just seems unlikely she could come down with enough force to knock a man out. Either that or Penn passed out. That is my uncertainty. Good little effort, wasn't long and read smoothly.
If so, it just seems unlikely she could come down with enough force to knock a man out. Either that or Penn passed out. That is my uncertainty. Good little effort, wasn't long and read smoothly.
I once told this blond chick to screw in a light bulb..
She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"
She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"

