love me yet?

[rowens]

Maybe you could drop off some of the excess rhythm. Like:


What does a person have to do
to get you enthralled?
I've sunk lower than I ever have before,
turned into a bottom feeder.

and

a head and shoulders
nothing to do with stature,
high above the rest.
Would that work?
It could ingratiate me to you
(I love to feel your smirk)
How about if I danced,
a tap dance just for you,
in a spotlight of my making.

and

Why don't you feel enamoured?
I've knocked the competition,
those that clamoured
for your attention,
shown them up for the
less than me they are.

Make it less sing-song like.