08-11-2013, 09:17 PM
Its hard to get a singular overall concept, but that may also have been your intentions by using "feelings". I like the in text double rhyme but i have to assume that it was unintentional cause it has no pattern and only appears once; "Living is a must. Got to trust that.". unless stay and runaway is intentional too. hhmmm. overall it has elements that work and i like it, maybe change line 2 so its a statement and not a question, which may help flow.