Behind the screen
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(08-10-2013, 04:27 AM)amberdwn Wrote:  8
Fake name, fake face,
just another one to my list
You accepted the challenge,
never once did you resist
Twisted fantasies and a few compliments,
pretty much the same old game
You knew nothing more
than a phone number and name



They fell so deep, so hard and so quickly
I played on their emotions and got what I wanted so swiftly
I hid behind their face and let them persuade and convince
I prided myself in the game I had; why were they so dense
Do people really want love so bad that they’ll do anything?
They agreed to it all, they can’t place the blame on me
They lied to me; all the while I knew what really went on
Male or female they tried to manipulate me; how sad and wrong
I remember the first time I promised it would be my last
About 10 people later, the faces were blurred it happened so fast
Why subject yourself to abuse and cruel names
They all put with the same shit, no way am I to blame
I was the cousin or best friend, whatever made more sense
Our relationship was based on a false pretense
After I got what I wanted I was on the next
I just wanted to feel and touch their warm flesh
Be warned, nothing is ever as it seems
Yu never know truly who’s behind the screen.

7/27/13

I don't really feel qualified but I would break up the lines like I've done above for the first few, also, you start off rhyming well but then it gets a bit clunky and erratic.
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Behind the screen - by amberdwn - 08-10-2013, 04:27 AM
RE: Behind the screen - by Keith - 08-10-2013, 11:49 PM
RE: Behind the screen - by ScurryFunger - 08-11-2013, 12:44 AM
RE: Behind the screen - by amberdwn - 08-11-2013, 03:21 AM



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