08-10-2013, 05:29 AM
I like the beginning and end, some of the references in between have me flummoxed - Joseph's staff, Nature's sweets and idols, the bread and stones.
The capitalisation of Nature, Summer and Earth caused a slight sinking of the heart but we didn't get a full pseudo-pagan onslaught. Thank God.
I watch her through a pub window - I wonder what this is doing, why you need it?
I walked to work the next morning with grief. - maybe "grieved" instead of with grief.
The capitalisation of Nature, Summer and Earth caused a slight sinking of the heart but we didn't get a full pseudo-pagan onslaught. Thank God.
I watch her through a pub window - I wonder what this is doing, why you need it?
I walked to work the next morning with grief. - maybe "grieved" instead of with grief.
Before criticising a person try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise that person, you are a mile away.... and you have their shoes.