08-09-2013, 03:36 PM
to reinforce christophersea's feedback i'll just say 2nded.
beside his points, i'd say, beware of wordiness, beware of things that don't make sense (how would the bird know of socks or toast etc)
beside his points, i'd say, beware of wordiness, beware of things that don't make sense (how would the bird know of socks or toast etc)