Bird (edit 2)

[ChristopherSea]

What kind of bird? Give it focus and significance or at least a previous life with color and variety, like a goldfinch or cardinal. This poem would generate more interest if you actually envied the peace and stillness captured in its death and contrast it with your hurried life. Think about it. The rhyme choices add little with mourning/morning and by/goodbye.


This would be another version that would say more:

Flight

So much on the wing this morning
that I nearly tread on a goldfinch,
limp upon the crosswalk,
most likely at peace now,
just like grandma.