Her Special Place

[billy]

A purple ocean over rolling hills;
The color "purple" sounds plain, Is there an alternative you might like instead? I know "violet" is a purple-blue color.
Just wondering if your content with purple or might be open to a metaphor or another word to explain the color.

that broad expanse of England's heathered spine
it held us captive, two Saturday ramblers.
Hiker's crooks, and boots ready to stride
I get "hikers crooks" Dont believe there is a better
option in word choice.
the granite altar. Spread throughout the moor
it was our solace, our place of worship.
We'd watch as tired waterfowl alit
on mirrored planes of silver painted ponds.

A thousand threads of white as ripples pushed
across a canvass of Picasso blue.
"Picasso blue" sounds cliche. I might be mistaken, but I thought I seen it used before on this site. I'd probably change it.
The Kestrels hovered hard against the wind and
waited on the wing before they dove.

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from the mentor thread

I get the main focus as "nature" or natural element. Observation. It isn't bad. It does come a little short to me. The ending is good enough.

thanks for the feedback R.C. will think on your suggestions.

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A purple ocean over rolling hills;
that broad expanse of England's heathered spine great line
it held us captive, two Saturday ramblers. Sunday would pick up the place of worship in S2
Hiker's crooks, and boots ready to stride good images

the granite altar. Spread throughout the moor I can see this
it was our solace, our place of worship.
We'd watch as tired waterfowl alit
on mirrored planes of silver painted ponds. Solid Stanza

A thousand threads of white as ripples pushed
across a canvass of Picasso blue.
The Kestrels hovered hard against the wind and
waited on the wing before they dove. visually very strong and I like the dive into lakes

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from the mentor thread

I have walked here Billy and this is a great depiction, my only bump was S1 L3 I'm not sure about the use of two. Thanks for the walk. Keith

thanks for the feedback keith. would

it held us both captive, Saturday ramblers.

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