08-07-2013, 05:16 AM
I like this poem, especially the 'ice cream' lines. But, IMHO,
I think the poem would be a much stronger one if you ended it
with "like the streetwalkers they've become". (And yes, this suggestion
is too simplistic.)
I think the poem would be a much stronger one if you ended it
with "like the streetwalkers they've become". (And yes, this suggestion
is too simplistic.)
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions