Impossible Waters
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(08-05-2013, 07:11 AM)brandonalsip Wrote:  Impossible waters

fill our sky with dreams
for fishers and for flyers

sow nightmares within timorous minds
of mountains dark and deadly

cover oceans like sheets
or vanish in cascades

structures
inspiring life immemorial

atmospheric murals redone a million times over
always changing, always beautiful

if heaven must be, it is walking on impossible waters
drowning in delicate vapors like the breath of God
I feel like you really let yourself get carried away with the adjectives at one point (constant and fickle steadfast and wavering unfeeling, cold, impermanent)

other than that I liked it!
Thanks for posting!
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Messages In This Thread
Impossible Waters - by brandonalsip - 08-05-2013, 07:11 AM
RE: Impossible Waters - by jdguyb - 08-06-2013, 01:37 AM
RE: Impossible Waters - by brandonalsip - 08-06-2013, 02:50 AM
RE: Impossible Waters - by makeshift - 08-06-2013, 03:07 PM
RE: Impossible Waters - by qwerty_H - 08-06-2013, 07:32 PM



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