Transient
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(08-06-2013, 03:15 PM)makeshift Wrote:  Dusk,
youthful child.
Daughter of day.

Pale,
hauntingly innocent,
helplessly small
prey.

Caught,
captive of time.
Left to decay.

Withering,
Lost and forgotten
Wasting a-
way.
I like the thought of personifying the times of day (I am assuming there will be 4 - dawn, day, dusk, night)

I also liked hauntingly innocent a lot!

that last line break on a-
way didn't really make any sense to me.

thanks for posting!
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Messages In This Thread
Transient - by makeshift - 08-06-2013, 03:15 PM
RE: Transient - by billy - 08-06-2013, 05:47 PM
RE: Transient - by makeshift - 08-08-2013, 01:26 AM
RE: Transient - by qwerty_H - 08-06-2013, 07:30 PM
RE: Transient - by alatos - 08-07-2013, 11:19 AM
RE: Transient - by SunRose - 08-09-2013, 08:36 AM



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