To someone.

[billy]

i love the title in relation to the context of the poem. the beginning of the poem points to a specific someone. yet the latter part points to a possibility of someone, it's a little wordy in places but there's something i can't put my finger on which makes me like it.

Softly sing in circles and twirl with the breeze i like the opening line but thing you could better rearrange the line. a suggestion; [Softly sing and twirl in circles with the breeze]
and say to me you'll not stray to heaven no need for [and]
or to its purple and green thunder clouds. no need for [to]
Stop with your homeopathic pills. check spelling of [homoeopathic]
We battled Lego's as if yesterday afternoon. lego or lego's something,
And our distance is like a loss that's not yet occurred, no need for [like] or [that's]
but please let it not occur.
I'd be a spectral man who chokes on every second,
crawling the halls of the world with quantum physics texts: physic's
a withered brain without an observer.
So please, ohh listen to my grieving,
don't die while I'm still living.