08-06-2013, 07:34 AM
Thank you for your very constructive criticism. I need all the help I can get as I am very new to this & I am very aware of my awful grammar. "did glory in truth" I agree is archaic."she linked his arm" is there because that was what happened. "soft" and "silk" I once again agree. "once" is an effort to describe the fact that the kingdom was once one of love, but was at that time it was no longer the case. I have enough now to attempt an edit thanks to you - As soon as I get the time that is 