08-05-2013, 12:51 AM
She might like it. I've seen girls break down and sob over worse.
It seems to rhyme and talk easy.
When you mangle sentences and force the easy rhymes, most people won't like that. But most people don't matter.
You could cut some of the awkward sounding lines, if you can see them yourself.
It seems to rhyme and talk easy.
When you mangle sentences and force the easy rhymes, most people won't like that. But most people don't matter.
You could cut some of the awkward sounding lines, if you can see them yourself.