08-02-2013, 05:11 AM
(08-01-2013, 03:49 PM)Aish Wrote: Since you said to take it literally I did, though I think it's just as potent (if less sanguine) metaphorically. Violence in senryu is new to me. A very interesting piece.Thanks so much Aish, for your feedback. The poem is meant to be taken literally. But originally I wanted every line to work metaphorically as well, but it ended up with being only the first two lines I felt had both levels.
Thanks again
-LB