08-02-2013, 02:43 AM
I thought that you liked it
when we kissed,
even though I smoke.
You ever read anything similar before?
The taste of nicotine
on my tongue
sticks in your mouth too.
My teeth are covered, thick
with the tar,
never clean enough.
The tar doesn't really have to be specified with a 'the'.
You never did like it.
Now I'm alone
with my cigarettes.
You can decide about the "did".
It's short and clear. Without the "enough", the "did" has its own crude charm, which I'm into these days.
when we kissed,
even though I smoke.
You ever read anything similar before?
The taste of nicotine
on my tongue
sticks in your mouth too.
My teeth are covered, thick
with the tar,
never clean enough.
The tar doesn't really have to be specified with a 'the'.
You never did like it.
Now I'm alone
with my cigarettes.
You can decide about the "did".
It's short and clear. Without the "enough", the "did" has its own crude charm, which I'm into these days.