Forever and evrah

Forever and evrah

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08-01-2013, 10:33 PM

The rhyming only seems forced in some areas. But otherwise I really like this poem. Your rhyming scheme is nice keep it up!
I only wish there was more imagery. It's hard to see what your saying.

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Forever and evrah - by 250xflo - 08-01-2013, 04:40 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by jdguyb - 08-01-2013, 10:33 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by TheWall0912 - 08-01-2013, 11:28 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by 250xflo - 08-01-2013, 11:52 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by billy - 08-02-2013, 07:54 AM

RE: Forever and evrah - by 250xflo - 08-02-2013, 10:40 AM

RE: Forever and evrah - by billy - 08-02-2013, 10:45 AM

RE: Forever and evrah - by 250xflo - 08-02-2013, 11:08 AM

RE: Forever and evrah - by billy - 08-02-2013, 11:47 AM

RE: Forever and evrah - by 250xflo - 08-02-2013, 03:17 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by billy - 08-02-2013, 04:12 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by Bekkere - 08-03-2013, 10:49 PM

RE: Forever and evrah - by 250xflo - 08-04-2013, 09:50 AM

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