To Be English

[heslopian]

There are a lot of wise phrasings and beautiful language used here, but it felt more like a commentary done by a poet than a poem-- hope that doesn't sound insulting.

>< Thanks for sharing and feel free to ignore me.

I could never ignore you And yes, your commentary remark makes sense and doesn't sound insulting, just honest I like your suggestion about the "baby's fist" line. An old and withered hand might be more effective.
Regarding the first verse, the castle hasn't been abandoned, it's been removed completely, and the brown grass is what it once sat on.
Thank you for your insightful feedback, Wildcard

just saw this jack, will give a reply tomorrow as i have to cook din dins

Cheers, Bilbo