One more attempt

[billy]

Hello members, my second attempt at poetry, feedback appreciated.

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She fades away
hopes and dreams astray
visions of her here to stay
haunting memories of a mid-summer day

a feeling never experienced before
despair, lack of ability form the metaphor
symbolizing words I chose to ignore
walk in, shut the door

feeling sorry for one's self
her belongings, lifeless on a shelf
the questions commence
why her not someone else?

could it be revenge?
is life here to avenge
the former souls I bothered?
cant this be existence?

suddenly it makes sense
this is it no further resistance
seek no assistance
all born equal, reality kept consistent

give some feedback elsewhere please/admin
6 posts and no feedback,,,,,does it seem fair to you !