07-28-2013, 06:00 PM
So it's about getting under someone's skin? It seems to me as if there are several ideas pulling in different directions here. Not sure if they should all squash in the same poem.... however, I like the separate elements.
(07-28-2013, 10:19 AM)Aish Wrote: summer romance drips
the taste of moon in my mouth
under your sky-map