07-27-2013, 06:08 PM
(07-24-2013, 11:25 PM)TheWall0912 Wrote: Today I packed a picnic.I like the ending. At first I thought the refrain had to much simplicity but it all ties well with the ending. Don't really see anything to make a suggestion on. Good work.
A sandwich for me
and none for you.
The meal is not for two.
Today I packed a picnic.
I brought a book
to read aloud.
That will be the only sound.
Today I packed a picnic.
I have a blanket
the shape of a square.
Half of it will be bare.
Today I packed a picnic.
Seeing you
I must be brave.
I ate it at your grave.
I once told this blond chick to screw in a light bulb..
She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"
She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"