Africa

[R.C. KITCHENS]

As my eyes wander dreamingly astray

"dreamingly" doesn't feel right, you could just
say "as my eyes wander"

from one star to the next in rapid pace
Getting lost and ending up far, far away
on the night sky of an unknown place

I see under a moon so round and bold
dont know about this line, "I see under a moon so round and bold"
shadows working though the sun has set
Still their hands are empty and cold;
their foreheads dusty, bathing in sweat

I think about those who don’t own a pen
– what do they do when they want to write?
those who lie sleepless in their humble den
kept awake by thoughts but without a light
don't think the last line works well

And I wonder how they all ended up here;
all the papers, pencils, erasers, and books
Some of them must have come from there
carved out of an old Adansonia's[/i] crooks

Edit 2

AFRICA

I let my eyes wander fearlessly astray
I like this edit.
from one star to the next in rapid pace,
getting lost and ending up far, far away
on the night sky of an austral place
had to look up "austral". Believe I liked "unknown place" above austral.
If your going to use austral, I think "plane" might be an option.

And under its moon so round and bold
I think you could start off with "Under"
shadows labour though the sun has set.
like the use of "labour" over working. But, I would use the term "labor"
Still their hands are empty and cold;
their foreheads dusty, bathing in sweat

I think about them, who don’t own a pen
– what do they do if they want to write? –
those who lie sleepless in their humble den
awake with inspiration and without a light
like the edit here. It reads better.
And I wonder how they all ended up here;
the And here seems alright to me.
our papers, pencils, erasers, and books.
Some of them must have come from there
carved out of an old Adansonia’s crooks

Some good edits. Austral might be an awkward word.