07-27-2013, 01:58 AM
the wall, very effective poem. Last line did take me by surprise. I have never seen the theme of picnics be used to highlight a dead love. Reguardless! i think the reason why your first stanza is so perfect is it creates a mystery where death, is an outcome which is unpredictable. The shift in tone doesn't come till the end. Awesome poem! thanks!
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
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--mark twain
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