Picnic for One
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(07-24-2013, 11:25 PM)TheWall0912 Wrote:  Today I packed a picnic.
A sandwich for me
and none for you.
The meal is not for two.

Today I packed a picnic.
I brought a book
to read aloud.
That will be the only sound.

Today I packed a picnic.
I have a blanket
the shape of a square.
Half of it will be bare.

Today I packed a picnic.
Seeing you
I must be brave.
I ate it at your grave.
Hi,
This is worthy! It has all the elements of black humour...but hidden until the admirable end. Poetry does not need to be complicated, convoluted or cavalier...this is as good as it gets in this genre.
In fact, the more I read it the more I like it...so write something else. I can't wait.
Best,
tectak
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Messages In This Thread
Picnic for One - by TheWall0912 - 07-24-2013, 11:25 PM
RE: Picnic for One - by Magpie - 07-24-2013, 11:40 PM
RE: Picnic for One - by tectak - 07-27-2013, 12:51 AM
RE: Picnic for One - by Bunx - 07-27-2013, 01:58 AM
RE: Picnic for One - by TheWall0912 - 07-27-2013, 03:45 AM
RE: Picnic for One - by R.C. KITCHENS - 07-27-2013, 06:08 PM
RE: Picnic for One - by Volaticus - 07-28-2013, 08:04 AM
RE: Picnic for One - by billy - 07-28-2013, 10:32 AM



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