07-26-2013, 09:08 PM
I agree with most of the previous comments. Instead of telling the reader something, SHOW them. Paint a picture through your words. It makes the read more effective and powerful. I like the message though and this is a good start. Another suggestion, which you can take or leave by your own choosing, since your title is "Truth" I would suggest taking out "Truth is" from the first line and just start with something. If you leave it in, it almost seems redundant. Good read though, thanks!