Still havent figured the name

[soonforgotten?]

What i really like about this poem is "a river crying for the sea" - beautiful! And then at the end you reveal that it is actually love, that yearning feeling methaphored as a river... I like that! That is the strenght of the poem and what you should really focus on and try to expand further.

The rest of the poem is quite meaningless and completely lacks form. That's the bad news. The good news is you don't need to worry about thoroughly altering it when you reedit the poem.

Good luck!!