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Rough Morning?
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07-26-2013, 12:56 AM
Overall a good poem. But the rhyming seems random like you just needed an excuse to rhyme with anything. The rhymes kinda make it random. It's almost like the rhymes don't have meaning and they take away from the messege your trying to convey. The last two stanza's though are great
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Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 05-21-2013, 09:35 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Leanne - 05-22-2013, 04:53 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 05-22-2013, 05:47 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Ryan_w_r - 05-23-2013, 02:29 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 05-23-2013, 10:06 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by tadaki - 05-26-2013, 02:04 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by lifethroughwords - 05-27-2013, 11:03 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 07-25-2013, 03:46 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by tectak - 07-25-2013, 08:12 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 07-25-2013, 11:21 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by jdguyb - 07-26-2013, 12:56 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 07-26-2013, 06:23 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 07-02-2024, 08:45 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by rayheinrich - 07-02-2024, 09:23 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 07-03-2024, 03:03 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by rayheinrich - 07-04-2024, 02:05 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 07-05-2024, 11:59 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by rayheinrich - 07-05-2024, 05:17 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 08-19-2024, 10:42 PM
RE: Rough Morning? - by DanGWoodle - 09-26-2024, 04:02 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Quixilated - 09-26-2024, 04:58 AM
RE: Rough Morning? - by Bunx - 09-26-2024, 12:31 PM
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