Coup

[Leanne]

Coup

A desperate cry,
a whispered please,
a knife slid in,
with playful ease.

Three in the morning,
two voices raised,
one shot rang out,
zero were saved. -- instead of "zero", with the emphasis on the first syllable, you could try "but none" or "and none" depending on the connotation you'd prefer

Tying the knot,
he hoped for death,
hanging there, -- this line could do with an extra syllable, maybe "while hanging there"
he begged for breathe. *breath

Death finds us all,
we wait our turn.
We live our life,
to watch it all burn. -- this line has an extra syllable, so I'd take out "all"

Hi there. Your economy makes for some good drama, with only a few details but enough hints that we know exactly what's going on. You could look at your meter to strengthen this and I've put a few examples in the text for you. Hope that helps.